同步共学|七下第二单元|学生作业集锦（二十九）
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;">今天与<span style="color: black;">大众</span>分享的是板块四“同心抗‘疫’的中华脊梁”中的任务二的学生成果。</span></p>
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<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;">今年寒假，<span style="color: black;">咱们</span>都经历了一个<span style="color: black;">区别</span>寻常的超长假期，<span style="color: black;">倘若</span>你是陈彦然，你将<span style="color: black;">怎么样</span>记录自己的心路历程与成长？自拟题目，写一篇作文。字数在500字以内。</span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;">假如我是陈彦然</span></p>
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<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><strong style="color: blue;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">她<span style="color: black;">再也不</span>是我个人的妈妈</span></span></strong></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">北戴河区第二中学</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">张馨艺</span></span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">今年有一个漫长的寒假。疫情像一张灰色的网，散布在每一个城市的每一个角落。</span></span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">用妈妈的话说，她是去打仗，武汉<span style="color: black;">患病</span>了，妈妈去<span style="color: black;">守护</span>它，去照顾</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">它</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">。我<span style="color: black;">晓得</span>，<span style="color: black;">大夫</span>是神圣的</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">，</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">是无私的</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">。</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">我<span style="color: black;">亦</span>深知疫情的严重性。</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">可是</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">当我得知妈妈<span style="color: black;">亦</span>要远赴武汉，心里总是有说不出的难过。我担心她，</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">况且</span></span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">她只是我个人的妈妈，<span style="color: black;">因此</span>她<span style="color: black;">不可</span>去照顾别人！</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">可是妈妈还是去了武汉。</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">临走前，我躲在被窝里，潸然泪下，我不想见任何人。</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">我不敢看她的背影，</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">我怕她一走就再<span style="color: black;">亦</span>回不来了</span>……</span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">后来，妈妈</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">提</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">起了我的梦想</span>——去武汉大学读书，</span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">爸爸<span style="color: black;">亦</span>跟我说了他保家卫国的梦想。而</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">妈妈的梦想</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">，</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">是做一位尽职尽责、不忘初心的医</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">生。</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">她想去武汉治病救人，她想把爱传递给武汉的人民。</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">是啊！我要支持妈妈</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">的<span style="color: black;">选取</span>，让妈妈<span style="color: black;">无</span>负担的、全心全力的为武汉添一份力。</span></span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">妈妈是一位优秀的<span style="color: black;">大夫</span>，<span style="color: black;">亦</span>是舍不得<span style="color: black;">孩儿</span>的妈妈。</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">经过</span>视频，我看到了她的防护服上，写下了对我的牵挂，对我的担心与鼓励。看着那一行充满母爱的字</span>——“合肥第四十五中陈彦然，认真写作业。”我下定决心，<span style="color: black;">必定</span>不让母亲为我担心，认真学习，完成自己的梦想。</span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">无</span>想到那个视频，那个身影竟然让我心目中那所学校的校长为我写了一封信。</span>“当得知考入武汉大学是你的梦想，<span style="color: black;">做为</span>武汉大学的校长，<span style="color: black;">亦</span>是你的安徽老乡，我很欣慰。”我反复的读着这封信，心中激动又害怕，激动的是武大校长用语言带给了我<span style="color: black;">极重</span>的鼓励与支持，但我<span style="color: black;">亦</span>害怕自己会辜负这么多人对我的期望。<span style="color: black;">因此</span>我下定决心，为了我的梦想，<span style="color: black;">亦</span>带着这么多人对我的期望拼一把！</span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">妈妈在武汉，但她在疲劳过后进入<span style="color: black;">休憩</span>室的时候，总会挤出时间，用短暂的时间与我视频通话。一线的妈妈使我的班<span style="color: black;">专家</span>和<span style="color: black;">朋友</span>们的家长总是非常关注我。我认真完成的作业被<span style="color: black;">每一个</span>老师非常仔细的批改，<span style="color: black;">况且</span>在我生日那天收到了老师的祝福。老师对我的</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">关心</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">和<span style="color: black;">帮忙</span>，妈妈和校长</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">对我</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">的期望</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">，</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">让我不</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">再</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">觉得妈妈只是我个人的，</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">就像<span style="color: black;">那样</span>多在为武汉奋斗的人，<span style="color: black;">她们</span>都有自己的</span>“小家”，但<span style="color: black;">她们</span>心中更有祖国这个“<span style="color: black;">大众</span>”。</span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">我</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">关注<span style="color: black;">资讯</span>，</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">认识</span>到了<span style="color: black;">做为</span>医护人员的<span style="color: black;">她们</span>在一线到底做了什么。<span style="color: black;">她们</span>陪重症老人<span style="color: black;">一块</span>看夕阳，在防护服上写下对<span style="color: black;">病人</span>的鼓励，给<span style="color: black;">由于</span>疫情而无人照料的小<span style="color: black;">孩儿</span>当临时妈妈，替痊愈或即将痊愈的<span style="color: black;">病人</span>而真心高兴</span>……经过了这次疫情，我<span style="color: black;">亦</span>明白了家国情怀到底是什么。我<span style="color: black;">由于</span>有一个<span style="color: black;">这般</span>无私奉献，在一线奋斗的妈妈而自豪而骄傲。</span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">最后我祝愿一线的工作人员都<span style="color: black;">能够</span><span style="color: black;">安全</span>回家，染上新冠的<span style="color: black;">病人</span><span style="color: black;">早点</span><span style="color: black;">恢复</span>。生机勃勃的春天都来到了，疫情的结束还会远吗？</span></span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">点评</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">：开篇交代背景，渲染气氛。从<span style="color: black;">起始</span></span>“<span style="color: black;">安心</span>不下妈妈”到“要让妈妈<span style="color: black;">安心</span>得下”到“不辜负妈妈和校长”到“为妈妈而骄傲和自豪”，细腻的描写展现细腻的心思和内心的成长。“我”能站在妈妈的<span style="color: black;">方向</span>去<span style="color: black;">思虑</span>问题，能想到自己该做些什么，能心生责任感，能由小“家”关注到大“家”，能体会家国情怀，这<span style="color: black;">便是</span>陈彦然的成长，<span style="color: black;">亦</span>是作者的成长。</span></p>
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<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><strong style="color: blue;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">妈妈，你是我的骄傲</span></span></strong></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">石家庄市</span></span><span style="color: black;">81中刘格非</span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;">“<span style="color: black;">为何</span>要走？不是说好陪我<span style="color: black;">一块</span>过年吗？难道在你眼里，<span style="color: black;">哪些</span>与你无关的病人都比你的女儿重要吗？”</span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;">“<span style="color: black;">孩儿</span>，妈妈是个<span style="color: black;">大夫</span>，治病救人是……”</span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;">“你还是个母亲啊！<span style="color: black;">陪同</span>你的女儿不<span style="color: black;">亦</span>是应该的吗？！”</span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;">“<span style="color: black;">孩儿</span>，我很抱歉……”</span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;">“你总是<span style="color: black;">这般</span>说，可你<span style="color: black;">晓得</span>我不是想听你抱歉，而是想你留下来啊！”……短暂的沉默后，我跑进了卧室，把门反锁，蒙着被子抽泣起来。</span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">次日</span><span style="color: black;">晌午</span>妈妈敲我的门，用一种近乎于哀求的语气让我开门，要我吃点东西，我虽听着心疼，可我并<span style="color: black;">无</span>开门。母亲在门外对我说：</span>“<span style="color: black;">孩儿</span>，你要明白，妈妈是爱你的，但妈妈<span style="color: black;">不可</span>为了你将武汉的数千名<span style="color: black;">病人</span>置之<span style="color: black;">不顾及</span>，那是一条条<span style="color: black;">新鲜</span>的生命啊，我相信你<span style="color: black;">亦</span>不<span style="color: black;">期盼</span>看到<span style="color: black;">她们</span>离开这<span style="color: black;">漂亮</span>的人世间，对吧？“我隔着门，一边抽泣一边说“我<span style="color: black;">晓得</span>，可我害怕……”“妈妈<span style="color: black;">晓得</span>，妈妈答应你，妈妈<span style="color: black;">必定</span>会没事的，好吗？”我止住了抽泣，“嗯，妈妈去吧，妈妈<span style="color: black;">必定</span>要照顾好自己！”“好<span style="color: black;">孩儿</span>，先出来吃点东西吧，好吗？”“嗯！”我打开门，看着妈妈通红的双眼，才<span style="color: black;">晓得</span>她<span style="color: black;">一晚上</span>无眠。我与她相视一笑，<span style="color: black;">而后</span>便紧紧地抱在<span style="color: black;">一块</span>，我和她的眼泪就像开了闸的洪水<span style="color: black;">同样</span>，止不住地往下流。</span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">我的妈妈是一名<span style="color: black;">大夫</span>，我永远为她而骄傲。</span></span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">点评：整篇作文由冲突到理解，展示</span>“我”的心路历程。<span style="color: black;">倘若</span>再<span style="color: black;">详细</span>展示一下“妈妈”苦战抗疫的内容就更能<span style="color: black;">表现</span>“妈妈”的伟大和“我”的骄傲。</span></p>
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<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><strong style="color: blue;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">明月千里寄深情</span></span></strong></p>
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<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">世界上最遥远的距离<span style="color: black;">便是</span>这一秒她还在你的身边，下一秒她就离你远去，<span style="color: black;">况且</span>这一去可能就再<span style="color: black;">亦</span>不回来。</span></span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">我的妈妈是一位<span style="color: black;">大夫</span>，她有一个名字，光辉而又伟大，叫白衣天使。对，我的妈妈<span style="color: black;">便是</span>援鄂<span style="color: black;">大夫</span>中的一员。妈妈走的那一天<span style="color: black;">夜晚</span>，我哭了，留下的是什么泪我<span style="color: black;">亦</span>不<span style="color: black;">晓得</span>。我望着妈妈的背影渐行渐远。直到消失在了那拐弯处，抬头才<span style="color: black;">发掘</span>月亮正在挥洒皎洁的月光。妈妈你最<span style="color: black;">爱好</span>月亮对不对</span>?</span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">由于</span>你觉得月亮的颜色就像你的制服<span style="color: black;">同样</span></span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">纯洁</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">无瑕。</span>“你的梦想不是去武汉大学吗？武汉的樱花最美，武汉就像是一位重症的病人，妈妈需要去救治他。去帮你完成你的梦想。”妈妈临走时留下了这句话。这是我这些天<span style="color: black;">独一</span>忍住泪水的动力。妈妈你<span style="color: black;">晓得</span>吗？你离开的日子里，我认真的上好每一次网课，细心的完成每一天的作业。每次在手机上，看到冰冷的屏幕里<span style="color: black;">显现</span>了你温暖的语句 ，我就觉得妈妈你还在我的身边。妈妈你<span style="color: black;">晓得</span>吗？你离开的日子里，我轻轻抚摸过你</span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">的奖章证书</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">。望着你最<span style="color: black;">爱好</span>的长寿花，抚摸过每一片花瓣，每一片绿叶。望着天边云卷云舒，看天上的云</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">想象你像云<span style="color: black;">同样</span><span style="color: black;">每日</span>穿梭在病区里</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">。我<span style="color: black;">每日</span>关注<span style="color: black;">资讯</span>网络，<span style="color: black;">期盼</span>能在只言片语、零散的<span style="color: black;">照片</span>中寻到你的身影。每次看到你与我<span style="color: black;">一块</span>画的那枚武汉大学的校徽，我的眼里总是噙满泪光。<span style="color: black;">不外</span>妈妈，那不是伤心的泪，那是骄傲的泪水，是<span style="color: black;">由于</span>我有一个如此优秀的妈妈而骄傲的泪水。</span></span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"> <span style="color: black;">妈妈你<span style="color: black;">晓得</span>吗？我心里其实还有一个小小的愿望</span>:那<span style="color: black;">便是</span>我<span style="color: black;">期盼</span>自己像你<span style="color: black;">同样</span>是一个<span style="color: black;">大夫</span>，即便我这个<span style="color: black;">大夫</span>不是<span style="color: black;">那样</span>优秀，可是我仍以自己的方式去<span style="color: black;">保护</span>着我所<span style="color: black;">珍惜</span>的人。就像你<span style="color: black;">同样</span>，你以你自己的方式<span style="color: black;">保护</span>着你所爱的我和爸爸；<span style="color: black;">保护</span>着你所爱的武汉；<span style="color: black;">保护</span>着你所爱的中国。</span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"> <span style="color: black;">妈妈<span style="color: black;">倘若</span>你想我了，就抬头<span style="color: black;">瞧瞧</span>天上的月亮，那时我<span style="color: black;">亦</span>正在望月思</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">念你</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">。</span></span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">点评：这个陈彦然深情款款，温柔娴静。爱的力量指引她追随妈妈的信念。小作者很会抒情，氤氲的爱的情感迷迷蒙蒙。只是感性的抒发<span style="color: black;">太多</span>，理性不足。</span></span></p>
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<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">永远忘不了那天清晨</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">，</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">妈妈拖着行李箱渐渐消失在楼梯尽头。</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">忽的，</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">她</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">又</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">想起什么来似的，</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">回身向</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">我</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">望去</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">。<span style="color: black;">无</span>一句道别的话</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">，</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">无</span>一次温暖的挥手</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">，却</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">留下一个<span style="color: black;">繁杂</span>的眼神。是不舍</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">，</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">鼓励</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">，</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">还是安慰？我没能猜透</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">她</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">的意思。</span></span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">那天清晨</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">，</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">我揉着红肿的双眼，小心翼翼</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">地</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">听着外面的声音。</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">窸窸窣窣</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">的响声轻轻传入我的双耳。</span></span><span style="color: black;">“</span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">那是妈妈在收拾行李吗？</span></span><span style="color: black;">”</span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">我想</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">，</span>“</span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">为何</span></span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">她</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">必定</span>要去呢？</span></span><span style="color: black;">”</span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">我的视线又一次模糊了，轻轻闭上双眼</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">，</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">将</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">脸仰起</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">。我<span style="color: black;">奋斗</span><span style="color: black;">无</span>让眼泪滑落。<span style="color: black;">这般</span>的情景在昨天一整夜中<span style="color: black;">出现</span>了太多太多次，就像是有人<span style="color: black;">掌控</span>了时间轴，让这个景象反反复复</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">地</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">重演。</span></span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;">“</span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">宝贝起床了吗？</span></span><span style="color: black;">”</span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">这是父亲的声音。我</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">闷声</span>“</span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">嗯</span></span><span style="color: black;">”</span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">了一句。</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">他</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">轻轻推开门，<span style="color: black;">步行到</span>床头蹲下。</span></span><span style="color: black;">“</span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">妈妈在等你呢。</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">她</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">始终</span>等你和</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">她</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">道别呢</span></span><span style="color: black;">”</span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">。</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">父亲</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">轻声说。不等他反应过来，我竟一把抓住床头母亲送我的生日礼物</span></span><span style="color: black;">——</span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">我<span style="color: black;">始终</span><span style="color: black;">珍惜</span>的毛绒小熊</span></span><span style="color: black;">——</span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">向他扔去。小熊滚落到地上。我看着</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">它</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">翻滚到卧室门口，撞在正好进屋的母亲脚上。我一只手猛</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">得</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">拉</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">住</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">被子</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">，</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">把头埋起来</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">。</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">直到听到<span style="color: black;">她们</span>脚步声渐渐远了，我满头大汗</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">地</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">扯开被子，看到母亲拾起来重新在床头放好的小熊，我再一次用力将</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">它掷</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">出。砰的一声，小熊</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">撞在</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">门上</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">，</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">发出很大的动静</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">。</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">我仿佛听见父亲叹息的声音和母亲的抽泣。</span></span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">过了一会儿，我渐渐平静了心情，父亲轻敲房门。</span></span><span style="color: black;">“</span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">女儿</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">，</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">我跟你说几句话</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">，</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">好吗？</span></span><span style="color: black;">”</span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">我当然<span style="color: black;">无</span><span style="color: black;">回复</span>，他进来了</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">，</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">拉我起来</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">。</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">我坐在床头，他坐在我对面。</span></span><span style="color: black;">“</span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">妈妈要去打仗了，他和我说你最<span style="color: black;">爱好</span>武汉大学，你<span style="color: black;">始终</span>都很想去对不对？武汉<span style="color: black;">此刻</span><span style="color: black;">患病</span>了，武汉</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">很</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">需要妈妈。</span></span><span style="color: black;">”“</span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">可是我才是她<span style="color: black;">独一</span>的宝贝，妈妈只是我个人的妈妈</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">！</span>”</span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">我的嗓音越来越沙哑，我再说不出一句话。</span></span><span style="color: black;">“</span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">武汉<span style="color: black;">此刻</span><span style="color: black;">患病</span>了，<span style="color: black;">倘若</span>我不去治</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">它</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">，你将来还有<span style="color: black;">爱好</span>的大学读吗？妈妈是一名<span style="color: black;">大夫</span>，<span style="color: black;">更加是</span>一名战士。</span></span><span style="color: black;">”</span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">母亲的声音温柔而坚定，这一次我<span style="color: black;">无</span>把头埋进</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">被</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">子，而是抬起头勇敢地与</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">她</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">对视</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">。</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">我看到</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">她</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">的表情</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">中</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">有些不舍和牵挂</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">，</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">但<span style="color: black;">更加多</span>的却是勇敢和坚毅。</span></span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">她</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">是下了多大决心才做出这个决定的</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">？她</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">晓得</span></span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">，</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">这一去</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">是<span style="color: black;">寓意</span>着什么，</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">但</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">她</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">还是勇敢</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">地</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">一步步朝心里的方向走去。是的，对我而言，</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">她</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">是我个</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">人</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">的妈妈</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">；</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">但对国家而言，</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">她</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">却是祖国伟大的逆行者，真正的战士</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">！</span></span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;">“</span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">妈妈你走吧</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">，</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">不消</span>担心我</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">。</span>”</span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">我似乎下了</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">与</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">妈妈<span style="color: black;">一样</span></span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">大</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">的决心</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">。艰难地</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">低着头说出这句话</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">。</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">母亲激动地抱住我，眼泪濡湿了我的衣服</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">。她</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">最终</span>还是哭了，我<span style="color: black;">亦</span><span style="color: black;">最终</span>懂得她的心思了。</span></span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">那个温暖的背影在楼梯尽头渐渐缩小</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">，缩小，消失。</span>“</span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">妈妈加油，你要爱自己呀</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">！</span>”</span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">我竭尽全力大喊，下一秒</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">，</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">我几乎瘫倒</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">。</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">我</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">扶住</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">门框</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">，</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">看到母亲的脸重新出<span style="color: black;">此刻</span>楼梯尽头，留下一个坚毅而勇敢</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">，</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">留恋而充满<span style="color: black;">期盼</span>的眼神。</span></span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">点评</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">：本文视角独特，语言生动形象，有画面感。细节生动感人。尤其是结尾对母亲背影渐行渐远的动态描写，含蓄蕴藉，逼真而又感人，富有打动人心的力量。</span></span></p>
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<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">昌黎三中赵莉婕</span></span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"> <span style="color: black;">又一个忙碌的学期结束了，迎来了我最<span style="color: black;">爱好</span>的寒假，还有随之而来的一大堆寒假作业。</span></span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">寒假的刚<span style="color: black;">起始</span>我还<span style="color: black;">无</span>觉得和往年有什么<span style="color: black;">区别</span>，还是往年那种平静幸福的生活，妈妈<span style="color: black;">亦</span>是像往年<span style="color: black;">同样</span>监督我学习。倒是，充满<span style="color: black;">欢快</span>的春节过后，一种</span>“小怪物”闯进了<span style="color: black;">咱们</span>幸福的生活，它<span style="color: black;">便是</span>新型冠状病毒。</span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">听说那个病毒是<span style="color: black;">经过</span>蝙蝠传染的，最先<span style="color: black;">发掘</span>于湖北武汉，刚<span style="color: black;">起始</span>人们还没<span style="color: black;">留意</span>，照常出行，照常生活。经过几天后，确诊人数蹭蹭往上涨时人们才<span style="color: black;">起始</span>真正害怕起来。</span></span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">我的妈妈叫周国红，是一名白衣天使，在疫情还<span style="color: black;">无</span><span style="color: black;">那样</span>严重的时候，她还呆在家里，当她看到<span style="color: black;">资讯</span>上说武汉严重缺乏医务人员的时候，她就下定决心去支援武汉。临行的夜晚，我很难过，<span style="color: black;">亦</span>很害怕，妈妈见我<span style="color: black;">始终</span>没从房间出来，就站在我房间的门前叫我，我<span style="color: black;">无</span>开门，把自己反锁在了房间里，不是我不想开门，而是我怕开了门以后就舍不得妈妈走了。</span></span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">那几天，有人问我：</span></span><span style="color: black;">“</span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">你的妈妈去了武汉，把你丢下，你生气吗？</span></span><span style="color: black;">”</span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">我总是骄傲地说：</span></span><span style="color: black;">“</span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">不生气啊，妈妈去武汉是去拯救祖国，拯救<span style="color: black;">大众</span>，<span style="color: black;">为何</span>要生气啊！</span></span><span style="color: black;">”</span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">然则</span>说这句话的时候，我心里还是有一丝丝害怕，有一丝丝不舍的。</span></span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">自从妈妈去了武汉之后，妈妈就会不<span style="color: black;">按时</span>的打来视频通话，询问我的学习<span style="color: black;">状况</span>，我都会如实向她<span style="color: black;">报告</span>。</span></span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">每次打来视频通话的时候，我都能看到她那疲劳的脸上被防护用具勒出的痕迹，每次我都是强忍着眼泪笑着和她说再见。</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">看着妈妈疲倦的身影，渐渐地，我体会到妈妈<span style="color: black;">做为</span>一个医者的无私与无畏！我想：面对病毒，妈妈<span style="color: black;">亦</span>是害怕的吧！但医者的责任让她变得勇敢、坚强！</span></span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">我相信，这次疫情会<span style="color: black;">火速</span>结束的。</span></span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">武汉加油！中国加油！</span></span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">点评：<span style="color: black;">文案</span>能够站在陈彦然的<span style="color: black;">方向</span>总结自己的寒假生活，能写出自己对妈妈援鄂这件事的态度变化，<span style="color: black;">倘若</span>能够精简<span style="color: black;">有些</span>与援鄂事件无关的情节，使主题更集中<span style="color: black;">有些</span>就更好了。</span></span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><strong style="color: blue;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;"><img src="https://mmbiz.qpic.cn/mmbiz_png/Ljib4So7yuWjgINrN72W7AwgiaqWlJJfJg7RQPtVjGIF1m7QZ47gNtFk06Ql0nibicTvEpbtI4SXhThwcpmbfW7XvA/640?wx_fmt=png&tp=webp&wxfrom=5&wx_lazy=1&wx_co=1" style="width: 50%; margin-bottom: 20px;"></span></span></strong></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><strong style="color: blue;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">给妈妈的</span></span></strong><strong style="color: blue;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">一封信</span></span></strong></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">卢龙县卢龙镇中学杨雪杉</span></span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">亲爱的妈妈：</span></span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"> <span style="color: black;">您好</span> <span style="color: black;">！时间过得真快，一转眼，您逆行武汉<span style="color: black;">已然</span>半月有余了。您在那里一切都好吧！工作累不累？防护服闷不闷？是不是<span style="color: black;">每日</span>都在想我？先给您一个大大的拥抱，给我最亲爱的妈妈，我的英雄母亲！</span></span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"> <span style="color: black;">妈妈，离开您的半个月感觉比半年还要漫长，</span>“天上一天，地上一年”说的<span style="color: black;">便是</span>这种思念吧！离开您的日子，我认真完成作业，自己洗衣服，<span style="color: black;">每日</span>都要看<span style="color: black;">资讯</span>， 有时<span style="color: black;">亦</span>帮爸爸做家务，我<span style="color: black;">起始</span>慢慢<span style="color: black;">成长</span>了，懂事了，您 <span style="color: black;">不消</span>惦记我，安心工作吧！您不在家的这些天，我真的明白了<span style="color: black;">非常多</span>道理，尤其是这两天在抖音上看了您防护服上的字和收到武大校长的信以后。</span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;">2月23日，“人民网”抖音号的视频<span style="color: black;">火热</span>了<span style="color: black;">全部</span><span style="color: black;">微X</span><span style="color: black;">伴侣</span>圈，您防护服<span style="color: black;">背面</span>的字看哭了<span style="color: black;">非常多</span><span style="color: black;">非常多</span>人，<span style="color: black;">亦</span>让我看一遍哭一遍。亲爱的妈妈，无论您<span style="color: black;">步行到</span>哪里，心里最牵挂的都是我呀！想起临行前我不想让您去武汉，说您是我一个人的妈妈。我真的很惭愧。<span style="color: black;">此刻</span>我<span style="color: black;">已然</span>明白：妈妈，您不仅是我一个人的妈妈，<span style="color: black;">更加是</span>一名优秀的护士，抗疫前线的英雄。我需要您，武汉人民更需要您。妈妈，您安心工作吧！我<span style="color: black;">必定</span>认真写作业，做您的乖女儿，和爸爸<span style="color: black;">保护</span><span style="color: black;">咱们</span>的小家，等您胜利凯旋。</span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;">2月26日，武大校长对我隔空喊话，他鼓励我刻苦学习，将来能够常驻“珞珈山”！窦校长的来信我看了一遍又一遍，我的心情非常激动，<span style="color: black;">长时间</span><span style="color: black;">不可</span>平静。我<span style="color: black;">必定</span>不会辜负窦校长对我的期望，<span style="color: black;">奋斗</span>学习，<span style="color: black;">将来</span>能如愿常驻“珞珈山”。</span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">亲爱的妈妈，抗击</span>“非典”您冲在最前列，汶川地震您奋勇争先，抗击新冠您义无返顾。您是我的好妈妈，您是优秀的护 土，您是我心中的的英雄！我<span style="color: black;">必定</span>会发愤图强，<span style="color: black;">成长</span>了<span style="color: black;">亦</span>要像您<span style="color: black;">同样</span>报效祖国。</span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"> <span style="color: black;">妈妈，在这场<span style="color: black;">无</span>硝烟的战</span>“疫”里，太多太多像您<span style="color: black;">同样</span>的人逆流前行， 我相信，白衣天使会照亮<span style="color: black;">阴暗</span>，勇敢的逆行会让病魔退怯，英雄们的坚守会让寒冬散去。愿阳光<span style="color: black;">早点</span>明媚，欢迎您凯旋而归！</span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"> <span style="color: black;">您的女儿：小彦然</span></span></p>
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<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">点评：杨雪杉<span style="color: black;">朋友</span>的作文以书信的形式展示自己心路历程的变化，语言清新，文字质朴，让<span style="color: black;">咱们</span>见证了一个纯真多情又有点小自私的小<span style="color: black;">女子</span>的成长。</span></span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><strong style="color: blue;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;"><img src="https://mmbiz.qpic.cn/mmbiz_png/Ljib4So7yuWjgINrN72W7AwgiaqWlJJfJg7RQPtVjGIF1m7QZ47gNtFk06Ql0nibicTvEpbtI4SXhThwcpmbfW7XvA/640?wx_fmt=png&tp=webp&wxfrom=5&wx_lazy=1&wx_co=1" style="width: 50%; margin-bottom: 20px;"></span></span></strong></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><strong style="color: blue;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">母亲</span></span></strong></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><strong style="color: blue;"><span style="color: black;">——我的骄傲</span></strong></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">秦皇岛市<span style="color: black;">研发</span>区一中贾雯博</span></span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">在两旁堆积了少许残雪的小路上，在雏鸟盼望父母归来的啼叫声中，一个纤瘦的人缓缓向前走去，不时地向站在路边的我回头招手。我的视线慢慢模糊起来，直到那人渐渐消失</span>. . . . . .</span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;">“妈妈要去武汉一线抗击疫情！”这个令我震悚的<span style="color: black;">信息</span>就像一个霹雳，惶恐与不安充斥了我的大脑：<span style="color: black;">为何</span>我的妈妈要冒着生命危险去救毫不相干的人，她是我的母亲，是我个人的妈妈！</span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">天刚亮，我就跑进了父母的房间，扑在了母亲的身上，紧紧地拉住她，企图把她留下，可是刚一开口，眼泪就止不住往下流，嘴中就只能喃喃着</span>:“妈妈别走，妈妈别走......”</span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">妈妈一把把我抱在怀里，拭去我脸上的泪珠，她拍了拍我的，缓缓地张开嘴说：</span>“<span style="color: black;">孩儿</span>，妈妈是一名<span style="color: black;">大夫</span>。<span style="color: black;">大夫</span>的职责<span style="color: black;">便是</span>救死扶伤，<span style="color: black;">便是</span>在国家<span style="color: black;">处在</span>危难之际，<span style="color: black;">亦</span>要<span style="color: black;">不顾及</span>自己的性命，救他人于水火。”爸爸安慰我说：“<span style="color: black;">倘若</span>哪天国家需要爸爸重回战场，爸爸<span style="color: black;">亦</span>会拿起枪重新回去的！”爸爸妈妈的话让我重新审视了家与国之间的关系：以前我常常认为我的母亲只属于我个人，而<span style="color: black;">此刻</span>我的母亲是千千万万个医护人员中的一员，肩负着扶危度厄的责任，是一名国难当头应该挺身而出的战士。<span style="color: black;">由于</span>有国才有家，国泰民<span style="color: black;">才可</span>安。母亲，您是我的骄傲，是我学习的<span style="color: black;">典范</span>！我要在窦校长的鼓舞下，像您<span style="color: black;">同样</span>，奋勇向前！</span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">在前进的道路上，总免不了艰难与坎坷，荆棘与磨难。但我始终坚信：我的母亲、我的国家都会<span style="color: black;">安全</span>归来。</span></span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">点评：小作者<span style="color: black;">经过</span>认真剖析陈彦然的心路历程</span>:从不舍妈妈离开—理解妈妈的做法—以妈妈为骄傲，并付诸<span style="color: black;">实质</span>行动，将陈<span style="color: black;">朋友</span>的思想认识变化写得非常深刻，<span style="color: black;">表现</span>了他在家国情<span style="color: black;">怀孕</span>的精神成长。</span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><strong style="color: blue;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;"><img src="https://mmbiz.qpic.cn/mmbiz_png/Ljib4So7yuWjgINrN72W7AwgiaqWlJJfJg7RQPtVjGIF1m7QZ47gNtFk06Ql0nibicTvEpbtI4SXhThwcpmbfW7XvA/640?wx_fmt=png&tp=webp&wxfrom=5&wx_lazy=1&wx_co=1" style="width: 50%; margin-bottom: 20px;"></span></span></strong></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><strong style="color: blue;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">妈妈，你要爱自己</span></span></strong></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">抚宁区官庄中学</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">王跃然</span></span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">我的母亲是位医务人员，她曾经参加过</span>2003年SARS和2008年汶川大地震的医疗救援。当时，虽然我觉得我有一个了不起的妈妈，<span style="color: black;">然则</span><span style="color: black;">无</span>她的日子真得很难受。</span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">在我上课结束后，我的妈妈走近了我的房间。</span>“妈妈，有什么事吗？”我疑惑地问。“对不起呀，宝贝。妈妈收到国家的召唤，要去‘打仗’了，<span style="color: black;">因此</span>要走了。”母亲面露难色地说。当时，我的眼泪止不住流下来了。心里真的难过极了。于是我躲到被子里，嘴还<span style="color: black;">一直</span>地说：“妈妈是我个人的妈妈……”说实话，我当时心里如刀割<span style="color: black;">同样</span>，非常难受。每次我只<span style="color: black;">想要</span>到妈妈又要走了，都会很害怕。我难过，我愤怒，<span style="color: black;">为何</span>病毒让我的妈妈不得不离开我的家！我<span style="color: black;">无</span>别的办法，只能用哭来表达我的心情，我的感受。<span style="color: black;">无</span>妈妈的日子真<span style="color: black;">能够</span><span style="color: black;">叫作</span>上度日如年啊！</span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">哭着哭着，我<span style="color: black;">忽然</span>听到房门被打开了。我<span style="color: black;">晓得</span>是妈妈，但我压抑不住心里的难过。<span style="color: black;">此时</span>妈妈对我说：</span>“宝贝，你还记得你的梦想吗？那个要考上武汉大学的愿望。”我心里一惊，妈妈说的正是我梦寐以求的愿望。“妈妈要去‘打仗’了，<span style="color: black;">仅有</span>打败了病毒，你才<span style="color: black;">能够</span>去武汉大学啊。”妈妈温柔地说。<span style="color: black;">此时</span>，爸爸<span style="color: black;">亦</span>说：“宝贝，爸爸曾经是军人，<span style="color: black;">倘若</span>哪天国家需要爸爸重回战场，爸爸<span style="color: black;">亦</span>会回去的，你要理解妈妈。”听爸爸这么说，我便从被子里爬出来，笑着对妈妈说：“妈妈加油！妈妈要爱自己哟！”妈妈笑着说：“妈妈<span style="color: black;">必定</span>会打败病毒，让你有机会考上武汉大学的！”</span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">妈妈，你在那里<span style="color: black;">必定</span>要<span style="color: black;">爱惜</span>自己啊！</span></span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">点评</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">：简洁的话语却掩不住心中的真情，平淡的叙述说的是最直接的叮嘱，从抗拒到支持的过程虽描述的短暂，<span style="color: black;">然则</span>一句</span>“妈妈，你<span style="color: black;">必定</span>要<span style="color: black;">爱惜</span>自己啊！”却<span style="color: black;">亦</span>感人至深。</span></p>
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<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><strong style="color: blue;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">青春成长</span></span></strong></p>
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<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">万物，享受着阳光的沐浴，或迎接着风雨的考验，或是在肥沃的土壤里，或是在陡峭的悬崖上，在它们的青春中成长。</span>——题记</span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">我叫陈彦然，来自合肥第四十五中。我的梦想是考上武汉大学，<span style="color: black;">期盼</span>有一天，我能实现梦想，和父母<span style="color: black;">一块</span>到那儿看樱花绽放。我的父亲是军人，母亲是医护人员，我<span style="color: black;">因此呢</span>而自豪，但我<span style="color: black;">亦</span>要接受光环之下的<span style="color: black;">暗影</span>，接受<span style="color: black;">她们</span><span style="color: black;">不可</span>经常<span style="color: black;">陪同</span>我的事实。</span></span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">刚上初中，<span style="color: black;">逐步</span>懂事的我更加<span style="color: black;">爱惜</span>和父母在<span style="color: black;">一块</span>的时光，虽然有时会<span style="color: black;">亦</span>和父母吵架，可<span style="color: black;">愉快</span>始终是<span style="color: black;">咱们</span>家的主旋律。半个学期转瞬即逝，父母给我带来的<span style="color: black;">哪些</span>美好回忆盈满脑海。这段时间，我非常依赖父母，每一次<span style="color: black;">她们</span>出差，我都会问<span style="color: black;">她们</span>何时回来，心中的不舍无以言表。<span style="color: black;">近期</span>，新型冠状病毒肆虐，妈妈<span style="color: black;">亦</span>要去一线了，我本以为这是一次普通的出差，却不知这一次是<span style="color: black;">很久</span>的分离。</span></span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">心中忐忑不安的我<span style="color: black;">经过</span><span style="color: black;">资讯</span>，<span style="color: black;">晓得</span>了事情的严重性。一想到武汉有<span style="color: black;">那样</span>多病人，<span style="color: black;">那样</span>多医护人员被感染。我非常担心妈妈的安全，怕她<span style="color: black;">亦</span><span style="color: black;">作为</span>病毒的<span style="color: black;">目的</span>。担心有什么用呢？我只能躲在被窝里哭，<span style="color: black;">乃至</span>任性地吵闹、呼喊，想让她留下来。在妈妈的劝导下，我<span style="color: black;">认识</span>到妈妈所承担的社会责任，那沉甸甸的分量，可容不得我任性。<span style="color: black;">不外</span>，我<span style="color: black;">亦</span><span style="color: black;">期盼</span>妈妈<span style="color: black;">守护</span>好自己。虽然，妈妈不在身边，我<span style="color: black;">亦</span>会认真学习，在妈妈奔赴前线的时候，我可<span style="color: black;">无</span>放纵自己的资格！</span></span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">妈妈离开以后，我的心被不舍和担忧包裹了一层又一层，一封悄然而至的信却如春风<span style="color: black;">通常</span>，吹醒了我心中的<span style="color: black;">期盼</span>。</span></span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">原来，武汉大学的窦校长无意间<span style="color: black;">晓得</span>了<span style="color: black;">咱们</span>一家的事，<span style="color: black;">晓得</span>了我的梦想。<span style="color: black;">因此</span>，我收到这封无比<span style="color: black;">宝贵</span>的来信。读过信后，我理解了妈妈的无私，对她的怨气<span style="color: black;">亦</span>被敬佩所取代。妈妈，您虽然是我个人的妈妈，但您的职业<span style="color: black;">便是</span>要在国家、人民的生死之危中，<span style="color: black;">不顾及</span>自己的生命去拯救<span style="color: black;">她们</span>！妈妈您真伟大！我要向您学习！</span></span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">同期</span>，我<span style="color: black;">亦</span>感受到心中那颗梦想的种子正在茁壮成长，我的眼前又浮现出武汉大学<span style="color: black;">哪些</span>绽放的樱花。我<span style="color: black;">必定</span>加倍学习，<span style="color: black;">奋斗</span>实现梦想，<span style="color: black;">期盼</span>在<span style="color: black;">将来</span>，我<span style="color: black;">亦</span>能和妈妈<span style="color: black;">同样</span>，为国家、为社会、为<span style="color: black;">哪些</span>需要<span style="color: black;">帮忙</span>的人献上一份绵薄的力量！</span></span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">放下信封，激动的心情渐渐平复，这一刻，我<span style="color: black;">再也不</span>是那个任性的<span style="color: black;">孩儿</span>了，或许这<span style="color: black;">便是</span>成长吧！成长<span style="color: black;">便是</span><span style="color: black;">咱们</span>的翅膀，让<span style="color: black;">咱们</span>的青春<span style="color: black;">作为</span><span style="color: black;">咱们</span>人生的转折点，我会尽全力<span style="color: black;">摆荡</span>这名为</span>“成长”的翅膀，借青春之风，振翅<span style="color: black;">遨游</span>！</span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">点评</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">：</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">开篇加入题记，简要点题，揭示了<span style="color: black;">文案</span>的主旨，意蕴绵长，引人深思。<span style="color: black;">文案</span>语言平实却以情动人，作者<span style="color: black;">经过</span>回忆展现出对父母的依赖以及深切的爱，字句之间，充满真情。文中多用对比，<span style="color: black;">陪同</span>与<span style="color: black;">拜别</span>、自私与无私、任性与成长</span>……矛盾贯穿始终，加强了<span style="color: black;">文案</span>的</span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">艺术效果</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">和</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">感染力</span></span><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">。</span></span></p>
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