优秀作文:《日落即景》《夏天的雨》
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<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><strong style="color: blue;">日落即景</strong></span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">五年级 朱欣怡</span></span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">傍晚时分,原先闪烁着刺眼的光芒的太阳,<span style="color: black;">亦</span>渐渐收敛了那傲气逼人的光芒,她略施粉黛,迈着小碎步向西方移去。</span></span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">此时</span>,太阳像一个火红的圆盘,在四周闪着光芒,她身边的晚霞在<span style="color: black;">持续</span>的换衣,既有黄澄澄的桔子红;又有金灿灿的鸭蛋黄红;既像黄红交融的金鱼红;又像可口的苹果红......五颜六色,<span style="color: black;">漂亮</span>极了!</span></span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">逐步</span>地,太阳的脸更红了,就像一团正在燃烧的火焰。它慢慢地往下移,四周到处都是金灿灿的,<span style="color: black;">反常</span>闪烁。<span style="color: black;">此刻</span>的太阳虽然不像<span style="color: black;">晌午</span>时分<span style="color: black;">那样</span>刺眼,<span style="color: black;">然则</span>更像一团正在熊熊燃烧的大火,不刺眼但更有激励人向上的力量。</span></span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">太阳落山的速度越来越快了,从大圆变<span style="color: black;">成为了</span>半圆,就像是人们所说的太阳被天狗吃掉了<span style="color: black;">同样</span>,而产生了日食。过了一会,半圆又变<span style="color: black;">成为了</span>一轮烧红了的镰刀,与月亮格外<span style="color: black;">类似</span>。</span></span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">趁着太阳最后的一丝光芒,西山下的大海波光粼粼,海面上闪烁着耀眼的金光,静静地享受着太阳最后的爱抚。松软的沙滩上,五颜六色的贝壳<span style="color: black;">亦</span>衬托着太阳光而闪烁着迷人的光芒。一群群捡贝壳的人们,吹着凉凉的海风,<span style="color: black;">愉快</span>得追逐,打闹,嬉戏,任调皮的浪花<span style="color: black;">怎样</span>打湿<span style="color: black;">她们</span>的衣裳。人们走后,沙滩上留下了一个个金黄色的脚印......</span></span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">过了几分钟,太阳<span style="color: black;">已然</span>完完全全地消失在了地平线上,四周<span style="color: black;">亦</span>变得<span style="color: black;">暗淡</span>起来,就像是谁打翻了黑色的墨水<span style="color: black;">同样</span>。</span></span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">眼前的景色变换得如此迷离,我被陶醉了。</span></span></p>
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<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><strong style="color: blue;">日落即景</strong></span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">五年级 俞叶婷</span></span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">我爱看日出更爱日落,<span style="color: black;">因此</span>今天我特意爬上楼去看日落。</span></span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">此刻</span>的太阳<span style="color: black;">已然</span>泛红,还有点发出金黄色的光芒,飞向远处的大雁被这光芒所吸引。瞧,太阳还特地为它们披上了“新披风”来迎接它们。哦,你看,太阳还在为刚才的事情笑呢!一张圆溜溜的脸蛋变得更红了,把周边的云彩都染上了色彩。雪白的云朵被色彩的<span style="color: black;">包围</span>而变得有些透明,像一件五彩的锦衣,把太阳围住了。</span></span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">渐渐地,太阳把“脸”埋进了云彩里,只露出了“眼睛”。刚才那温柔的太阳仿佛一下子变得神气十足,那种火热的红,仿佛燃烧的红,让人<span style="color: black;">没法</span>用言语来描述,那是一种多么雄伟的景色啊!<span style="color: black;">周边</span>的一切都变红了,湖面上<span style="color: black;">亦</span>泛着点点金光,山峦<span style="color: black;">亦</span>被染上了颜色。山上有了奇特的渐变色。<span style="color: black;">本来</span>绿油油的山顶上有了绚丽的渐变色:火红—橘红—紫—浅绿......山仿佛像<span style="color: black;">一起</span>分了层次的<span style="color: black;">果蔬</span>蛋糕,让人看了有些眼馋。</span></span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">又过了一会,太阳累了。一点一点越过了小山,<span style="color: black;">本来</span>撒在旁边建筑物上的金光一点点被收回了。可太阳依旧不舍地<span style="color: black;">保持</span>着<span style="color: black;">奋斗</span>地散发着最后的余光。哦,太阳,你该回去了。瞧瞧大街上的人都急着回家去呢。咦?这不是交警叔叔吗?太阳啊,你是不是为这辛苦劳动的人们而发出最后的余光呢?<span style="color: black;">倘若</span>是<span style="color: black;">这般</span>,我替<span style="color: black;">她们</span>忠诚地感谢你。</span></span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">不外</span>,太阳,你那<span style="color: black;">漂亮</span>的光芒,我实在是<span style="color: black;">喜欢</span>,你那<span style="color: black;">保持</span>的品质让我敬佩。再见了,太阳,你将给另一个充满生机的<span style="color: black;">地区</span>送去阳光,带去温暖。</span></span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">明天,<span style="color: black;">咱们</span>又会与你相见,<span style="color: black;">咱们</span>都会有美好的<span style="color: black;">将来</span>。</span></span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">指点</span>老师:冯丁均</span></span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">就读学校:绍兴市快阁苑小学 </span></span></p>
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<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><strong style="color: blue;">夏天的雨</strong></span></p>
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<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">夏天的雨,吹着大喇叭,带着炎热与火辣,哗啦啦,哗啦啦,趁你没<span style="color: black;">重视</span>,降临你的身边。</span></span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">夏天的雨,是一盒五颜六色的蜡笔。你瞧,它把绿色给了西瓜,绿绿的西瓜像一个圆圆的球,滚来了夏天的炎热。它把黄色给了芒果,黄黄的芒果就像金色的小船,游着游着,游来了夏天的<span style="color: black;">愉快</span>。它把粉色和白色都给了荷花,<span style="color: black;">漂亮</span>的荷花像一盏盏<span style="color: black;">美丽</span>的宝莲灯,挂着挂着,挂来了秋天阵雨的凉爽。</span></span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">夏天的雨,有一封重要的信。它提醒<span style="color: black;">大众</span>,为了秋天的丰收,<span style="color: black;">大众</span>需要<span style="color: black;">持续</span>耕耘,别到了秋天一无所获。夏天的雨,藏着开心的笑容,它散发着阵阵凉爽。</span></span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">夏天的雨,不像春天雨滋润,不像秋天的雨<span style="color: black;">哀愁</span>,更不像冬天的雨寒冷……它带给大地的是一首炎热的歌,带给小<span style="color: black;">伴侣</span>们的是<span style="color: black;">愉快</span>的歌。</span></span></p>
<p style="font-size: 16px; color: black; line-height: 40px; text-align: left; margin-bottom: 15px;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;"><span style="color: black;">指点</span>老师:陈秀萍</span></span></p>
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